Iorio issued an extremely defensive press release.
City government is already working on many of the proposed actions in the agreement in order to protect our local environment for future generations. Tampa is developing a residential city center in downtown and Channelside to help reduce sprawl and create an urban, walkable community; preserve open space and green space throughout our neighborhoods through parks and pocket parks; providing city employees with a discounted bus pass as part of their benefits package; working to develop Tampa’s Greenways & Trails to connect our neighborhoods through bicycle trails; developing The Tampa Riverwalk to connect all of downtown’s amenities; working on green building and sustainability policies and codes through a committee that includes the local business community; promoting mass transit and improved commuter initiatives such as a meaningful circulator system; increased recycling efforts; and promoting tree planting through our annual 1,000 Trees program and beautification efforts.
What a horrible press release. I haven't seen run-on sentences like that since reading William Faulkner. The author of that jumbled mess is no Faulkner.
Well, I'm completely OUT of breath but I think that's as much from the above sentence (he) as from the car exhaust and general lack of air quality in the last few years here ....
ReplyDeleteI love a nice long, chewy sentence, but it really has no place in a policy statement like this. Although the semi-colons are used properly and the grammar is generally unassailable, it would have made more sense in terms of communicating to the particular audience for which it was intended if the statement had listed the various points/improvements Tampa has addressed in a bulleted list rather than a hard-on-the-eyes-and-attenetion-span compound sentence.
ReplyDeleteIt's the worse press release I have seen in a while. That's saying something. I've seen a lot of shitty ones.
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